THE WRITING PROCESS
Proofreading: Editing Practice (Exercise E)
See if you can locate and correct the ten sentence-skills mistakes in the following passage. The mistakes are listed in the box below. As you locate mistakes, place checks in the spaces provided. 3 sentence fragments ____ 1 mistake in pronoun point of ____ ____ view ____ 2 run-ons ____ ____ 1 dangling modifier ____ 1 irregular verb mistake ____ 1 missing comma between 1 nonparallel structure ____ two complete thoughts ____ Too Many Cooks The problem in my college dining hall was the succession of incompetent cooks who were put in charge. During the time I worked there, I watched several cooks come and go. The first of these was Irving. He was skinny and greasy like the undercooked bacon he served for breakfast. Irving drank, by late afternoon he begun to sway as he cooked. Once, he looked at the brightly colored photograph on the orange juice machine. And asked why the TV was on. Having fired Irving, Lonnie was hired. Lonnie had a soft, round face that resembled the Pillsbury Doughboy's but he had the size and temperament of a large bear. He'd wave one paw and growl if you entered the freezers without his permission. He also had poor eyesight. This problem caused him to substitute flour for sugar and using pork for beef on a regular basis. After Lonnie was fired, Enzo arrived. Because he had come from Italy only a year or two previously. He spoke little English. In addition, Enzo had trouble with seasoning and spices. His vegetables were too salty, giant bay leaves turned up in everything. Including the scrambled eggs. The cooks I worked for in the college dining hall would have made Julia Child go into shock.
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